The Black Smoke on the Horizon

How about I start...


< as ren came over the crest of the hill he saw a sight that made his blood run cold. (He was returning to the twon of his birth after many long years on the road serving king and country) but there could be no mistaking it Thick Dark Black smoke riseing on the horzion and right in the same direction of his town. He picked up his pace. afaried of what he might find but needing to know just the same>

What do you think huh.

I know this is not the RP thread, per-say...

but I have to...

As Ren, swiftly, but calmy ran he let off a since of fear and lonlyness, which led to him being discovered by Jay. Jay, hiding in a small, dark crevice in the mountain ridges, slowly bore his legs from under the slimey moss, and granite rocks that washed up from ashore the Red Malonian Sea. He slowly eyed the direction that Ren, whom he thought was the one whom forced his evacuation of his family and the ways he knew as life walked hastely by. With Jealousy and hate in his eyes, and adrenalin from fear, he forced himself up, and trotted, slowly, through the swamps of this once fine kingdom, now ruins of slayn kings, and mighty rulers. Jay managed to occupy inside 10 yards of Ren's presence, when Red, from exhation, had to kneel down. Jay could not gather the nerve to strike down a target in such a way. Jay, being an elf, abiding strictly to family, and honor. Pounced at ren and grabbed him by the neck, tuning his head to face him and in a murderous tone; "How could you come back to view what destruction you have made!? First my family, then my town, what did i, WE ever do to you?! "gwanno um!"

maybe?

< Ren's first instint was to go for his blade,... But there was something is the young elf eyes. He slowly released him self from the grasp. keeping his hands well clear from either his Bow or knife. "let me explane he said this was my Tow- but at that very secong they both heard a sound not unligh rolling thunder. the ground started shaking both Ren and Jak looked to the east. The towns destoryers had returned.....>

Best I could come up with so fast.