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Old Jul 21, 2005, 08:51 PM // 20:51   #41
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(I have to go for about 9 days T_T)"We may have their power but we dont have their experience.We have one choice to train in secret.To disappear and train or we will waste this power.He moved off into the forest.........
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The rest followed him. Through the night they traveled, jumping logs and wading rivers. These were all things they had done before, but never for this long. They soon grew tired with the conditions the things of the forest had given them. Exaustion, blindness, loss of energy, all these and more were affecting them, making their journey long and hard.

By daybreak they had come to a clearing deep within the forest. there were many small trees and warthog for them to practice their newlyfound powers upon. Dwayna, Melandru, Lyssa, Grenth, and Balthazar once again spoke to their army, "We trust that you will not take long," they said, "Our powers grow weaker the longer we give the to you. Trust that you have much skill in all our arts and practice little. The Charr are regaining numbers for another wave on Ascalon. We do not wish it to be destroyed. The fate of Ascalon is in your hands, our children. Do not dwadle."...
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>_<

I'm sorry I can't post.

Awfully busy.

Relatives coming over, and stuff.

Mm Sorry.

But I'll post as soon as I have time...


Busy busy day...

Im 15 and I should be enjoying my summer.
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Old Jul 22, 2005, 07:23 PM // 19:23   #44
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I agree.....stupid relitives....-_-;
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HEY,
My great, roleplaying friends!!!
I have just returned from a great 3-day vacation with friends and family at an hotel in hawaii.
But it doesn't matter tha much...as I already live there!

I hope I didnt keep you waiting for too long!

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It was twilight, and many moons have passed since Vantie had seen Sanjinu Dalsworth, Omega, and Alicia Stormcrow. All three of them had seperated to different parts of tyria, to practice the arts of the gods, in solitude. Vantie had taken Lyssa's power of illusion, hiding himself, in a cave, scaring wanderers away with his illusions of monsters. Omega had taken refuge in an church, practicing as a monk, learning the ways of dwayna. Omega had practiced so dutifully that he was appointed as an abbot. It was a different for Sanjinu Dalsworth and Alicia Stormcrow. They both had hidden off, far to the southwest of tyria. Using the power of melandru, they conjured huge land forms, to protect themselves from the creatures of the forest, and the humans.

But tonight was the time.

Tonight, was when all four of them would meet again.

Tonight...is when the four of them shall wipe out the Charr from the city and outskirts of Ascalon.

But tonight, ultimately, Vantie was going to be able to be with a fellow human. Unlike everyone else, he was always a loner. Sanjinu had Alicia, Omega had his fellow followers of dwayna, but Vantie was alone in his caves, as he always was in his life.

After 5 years of solitude, Vantie would be able to see Alicia's smile, hear Sanjinu's leader-like tone of voice, and see Omega's night elf snicker.

He couldn't wait.

When the moon came up, full, and bright. Vantiel walked outside. Feeling the fresh air of his opening surroundings, he felt his adrenaline surge and his spirits lift. Looking to the west, he turned around to have one final look at the cave he had spent a quarter of his life in.

Turning back, again, he ran off into the dark forests of the wilds, to meet up with his friends, at the last place anyone would suspect.

The catacombs, where he was found, as a infant, by Eve, when she herself was only a child also.
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Old Jul 25, 2005, 08:57 PM // 20:57   #46
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You live in Hawaii!

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naw he dont

anywayz continuing....



Eve was just a small child, about the age of four, when she found Vantie in the catacombs. Wrapped in a sky blue blanket covered in poison stains she found him lying on the lowest stair, closest to the poisoned waters of the catacombs. "Mommy!" she called turning around and running back up the stairs, "Mommy! Come look what I found!" "Just a minuet, sweetie." He mother said, patting little Eve on the head. She picked up what the undead had dropped and followed Eve down the stairs. "Look Mommy," Eve said, pointing at the bundle. Her mother picked him up and looked out over the poisoned waters to the staircase on the opposite side. There was a woman wearing black, tears rolling down her cheeks. She took one last look at the little boy she had left behind, turned, and ran, her cries echoing off the stone of the catacombs.

They took the little bundle home, thinking of what to call him along the way. "Bob." Eve said when the reached the ressurection alter outside of the catacombs, "I want to call him Bob." "Evie, I don't think thats such a really good name. How about Vanatiel?" "Vanananna...What was it again?" "Just call him Vantie, honey." "Okay, I like that better than Bob anyway."

So Vantie grew up with Eve and her mother, never knowing that he was abandoned. At least, not until he was 12. He was snooping around in Eve's room, as he usually did on rainy days, when he came accross a little pink book with 'Eve' embroidered on the cover in gold thread. He opened it. (I suppose his curiosity would've died down after this, but you know how men can be) He flipped through the faded pages until he actually came accross a page he could read. It was dated on his birthday, or what he believed to be his birthday until after he read the entry. It read, "Today is it, Vantie's birthday again. Mom keeps swearing she's going to tell him, but never does. Poor thing, not knowing we found him in the catacombs half dead when he was merely a baby. I just pray he doesn't find this before Mom tells him...". It was on this day that Vantie had gotten his scar...

(End Flashback)

"Vantie!" I called, running up to him, "God, I haven't seen you in nearly forever!" I hugged him."Where are Sanjinu and Omega?" He asked looking for them over Alicia's shoulder."We raced here, they still dont believe my armor is the lighest. Poor Omega, with all his armor I'd be amazed if he made it down here at all." Footsteps were heard racing down the last set of stairs followed by heavier steps. Sanjinu raced into view falling over and panting when he reached us. "I told you Aeromancing would come in handy eventually, Sanjinu." "Oh you and your Windborne Speed. Technically I should win, using that is cheating," "You never said anything about using spells, you're just sorry you didn't think of it." Just then Omega came panting from the flight of stairs. "I should've had a head start!" he panted glaring at Sanjinu, "You know how heavy this armor is!" "Yes, I do. But y'see, you're built to take that kind of thing." "Oh whatever, let's just get outta here its startin to give me the creeps." "You guys go ahead, we'll be right there." I said, turning back to Vantie again. "Something's bothering you again, Vantie." "It's just weird, seeing everyone again, y'know?" "Yeah, but you'll get used to them again. Five years hasn't changed them, well, it hasn't changed me anyway." I said, "But there's something that's been bothering me, since you told me the story of the massacre. I keep trying to remember what it was but I just can't." "What?" Vantie asked. "The last words you said to me before the White Mantle took you, what were they?" I asked...

(Hey ownage, do me a favor, unless I'm online, I mean like Alicia me, don't talk to me cuz it'll be my dad and he'll be all weird and stuff)

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Old Jul 27, 2005, 01:57 AM // 01:57   #48
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Ah..Yes yes..

Sorry about that Alicia..

But I had a fun conversation in-game with your father, IGN (Dirk Breen?)

I think I spammed "Alicia, hey, alicia? Helloo? Are you there? This is Vantie" about a hundred billion times until he replied "This isn't alicia."

And then I was like "What, who are you?" And then I eventually came to know that he was your father.

Then we talked for a bit, about howz I knew you from gwguru.

And it was fun and all.

But Sowwy if it got you into trouble.

And BTW

I DO live in hawaii.

I swear to god.

Cross my heart.

Wish upon my grave.



=-=-=-=-=-

Vantie still felt uncomfortable as Alicia offered him a chair to sit on. Sipping on his tea, his thoughts wandered. He was thinking about many things...mainly Eve, and a few other personal thoughts. His spazzing gaze was quickly inturrupted as Sanjinu appeared in front of him, and started dancing, excitedly.

"Heyylooo there Vantie! Long time no see!! Hows it going? Good? Ookey, great! Ah, nice nice. Ooh. Eve? Yeah. I remember. Uh-Huh. Yeap. That;s right. Cool"

And so the conversation between Vantie and Sanjinu continued, endlessly, until Alicia walked in.

She appeared through the door, and pouted on the spot.

"Vantie! You didn't drink all of your tea! I made it especially for this ocassion!"

Vanatiel grumbled on the couch for a bit, before he threw the remainder of the tea into the nearby plant pot.

Sanjinu, spotting the action, casually walked up to him and whispered "Don't worry, it doesn't taste that good anyways."

Relieved that Sanjinu wouldn't tell Alicia of his actions, Vanatiel settled deeper into the couch, becoming even more comfortable. It had been quite some time, since Vanatiel had ever been in contact with humans, let alone been civilized. He felt extremely embaressed when the four had dinner, and he was unable to use his utensils.

Later that night, when everyone had said their hello's and talked about what had happened over the past 5 years, they turned off all the lights, save for the one in the living room.

But something unexpected caught Vantie's eye.

It was Alicia's stomach.

It was bigger than before.

WAY bigger.

Vantie stared at her stomach while the other three continued to mindlessly talk. He couldn't hold it in much longer.

"Alicia....are you pregnant?"
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Old Jul 27, 2005, 05:57 PM // 17:57   #49
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No, no trouble he was just kinda annoyed, he and mom were in the middle of an ascention mission when u started talking to him, and you didn't answer my question....
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Pretending she didn't hear Vantie's question she continued talking with her old friends, sharing with them the the times of the past five years. They talked for quite some time, sharing old stories and joking about some of the odd people they had met. Vantie didn't share in the conversation. Hours went by with no words from him as he sunk back into the down-filled coushins of the couch. No one else spoke of what Vantie had noticed and he assumed that they either hadn't noticed, or already knew.

Alicia looked up at the clock on the mantle, "Is it that late already?" she asked standing from her chair. Omega and Sanjinu looked at the clock. "Oh jeeze, I had better get movin', the Mrs. would've expected me home by now." Omega said reaching for his coat. He thanked Alicia for her hospitality and left. Sanjinu didn't seem that eager to go and was pouting as he made his way to the door. "Yes it was nice talking to you, too. Yes. Yes. Buh bye now." she said closing the door. Click! went the lock. She went back to the living room where she had left Vantie and shook him awake. "Vantie, wake up." she said shaking him harder. He reluctantly opened one eye and looked at her. "Five more minuets." he said shooing her away. "No, we don't have much time before Sanjinu comes back pounding on my door." "Okay, okay, okay." Vantie sat up and yawned. "Have you decided that you are going to answer my question now?" "Yes, I am. Sanjinu really thinks it's his, and he's really excited, but..." she cut off and started to cry. "But, what?" Vantie asked. Alicia fell into his arms, "I don't want it to be his." she cried, "I don't want it to be his." "Why not?" Vantie asked. Alicia sat up and dried her eyes with her sleeve, "I want it to be yours."...
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Old Jul 27, 2005, 08:04 PM // 20:04   #50
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Aha!
A cleverly planned tactical offense against mister vantie.
But I shall break through your offense, with my own backfiring words of power!
Muahahahaaha
*Thinks Of A Great Comeback, To Twist The Story To His Will*
Muahahahahahaa
I think I have it
Muahahahaha

=-=-=--=-=-=-=

BTW, What was your question Storm?

I dont remember being asked a question

And BTW, A Big Lmao for talking to your parents on gw and making them annoyed.

Man...that must be great...having a family that enjoys computers as much as the son/daughter does.

I wish my parents were like that.

Lucky lucky.

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Vanatiel was speechless, as he stared at Alicia, with huge eyes.
He didn't know what to say, didn't know how to react to what she had just said. Vanatiel had never had touched a girl, ever, so the thought of being the father of Alicia's baby fooled him.

But it took him too long to realize that he was being joked with.

Alicia had clearly embaressed him.

Her sobs started to turn into what Vantie thought sounded like bursts of laughter. She tried to hide her face, knowing that Vantie would know of her plot. But Vanatiel knew oh too quickly that she was kidding around with him.

She couldn't hold it anymore.

She broke out laughing at Vantie, mocking his face, and mimicking it.

"Ahahaha! V-Vantie, you totally looked so hysterical!" She managed to stammer out between hiccups and bursts of laughter.

Suddenly Omega and Sanjinu popped out of nowhere, laughing along with Alicia.

Vantie finally realized what had happened, and pouted on the couch.

He looked at Omega.

"You sooo, didn't have a Mrs. I knew it! Liez!!!" He accused

Omega fell down from laughter, while Sanjinu danced around in happy hysterical joy.

Vantie stared at Sanjinu "And YOU! You didn't have to go home! You don't have a home! Your living with Alicia! How can I be so stupid.."

Vanatiel started to grumble with and eventually started talking to himself. Soon, the joke's was played out, and everybody calmed down.

Except Vantie.

He snuggled himself up in Alicia's warm fuzzy blankets and plopped himself on the couch. Disgruntled, and mad, Vantie sank into the couch, sighing to himself, as his comfort increased. Turning the lamp on, he picked up a scroll, reading the runes and tracing it with his finger.

He heard noises next door, probably Sanjinu And Alicia doing something wierd, as they always to together. He also heard Omega making a big ruckus upstairs, doing god knows what. The sun was going down. Vantie shuddered.

{Rubber}

Staring at his rune, Vanatiel was unable to see Alicia slowly walk into the room. The unsuspecting Vantie was soon to be a victim to Alicia. Still staring at his rune, Vantie had no idea what Alicia was planning.
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NOOOO!!! I DON'T WANNA BE EVIL!!! why did you have to make me evil? Thats not nice.../pout. Srry can't think of a good post to go along with that so ur gonna have to post again.

"The last words you said to me before the White Mantle took you, what were they?" <----That was the question
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Vanatiel said to Alicia Stormcrow, before he was taken away:

13|0oD |$ />oWeR.


(Blood is power)

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I dont know what to post alicia.

I dont want to force anything, it's like me putting words in your mouth. I sort of feel like it's commanding you to go with my story. It's not my style. You continue it, please.
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^^^wtf?

Oh....ok...thankies Ownage

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OkAyZ

Since were a bit stuck here, and all the women are pointing at me for doing a bad post. >_<

I shall REWRITE my post.

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Vanatiel was speechless, as he stared at Alicia, with huge eyes.
He didn't know what to say, didn't know how to react to what she had just said. Vanatiel had never had touched a girl, ever, so the thought of being the father of Alicia's baby fooled him.

But it took him too long to realize that he was being joked with.

Alicia had clearly embaressed him.

=-=-=-=-=-=

blah blah blah, is the post that the women didn't like that much.

So we shall rewrite, and do this well, hopefully meeting "standardS"

Heeeee


=-=-=-=-=-

Vanatiel looked down at the girl crying on his lap, who had just told him that she wanted her baby to be his. Vanatiel always thought that Alicia had feelings for Sanjinu, as when he had first met them, they were kissing. He never realized that she actually liked him {back}.

Vantie always felt a bit jealous to how close Alicia was towards the other two guys. They were very social unlike himself, as they had lifes filled with light and hapiness, and had the joy and company of the people who always surrounded them. Vanatiel lived in the darkness, of sadness, alone, as he always had, since he was a child.

He didn't know what to say. Alicia always seemed to care for Vantie, and his numerous pouts. Unlike the people that had shunned him from their village, from their homes, from their lives, Alicia was like a radiant aura of light that took him in, just as Eve had. But Eve was too similar to Vanatiel for his liking. His own necronian problems were enough.

Slowly he reached down with his gloved hand, and somehow got his fingertips underneath her chin. He slowly pulled her face up, and stared into her eyes, which were shimmering magically, with the glassy tears, like the shining raindrops that use to fall upon Vantie while he was alone in the isolated wilds.

"I never took my gloves off, before" he said, letting her chin rest on his knee, covered with his blackened armour. Vantie slowly tugged his gloves off, showing Alicia, the only person other than his childhood mother, see his bare hands. Wrought with scars and sickening lines, many people would become upset at this, but Alicia didn't.

She remained quiet, turning her head, so that she sat on the floor while having her turned head rest quitely on Vanatiel's knees.

Reaching up slowly, Vantie touched Alicia's silky, beautiful silver hair, the first thing he had touched with his bare hands, for a long time. He ran his fingertips through her hair, letting his hand feel her silky, long, silver hair.

She closed her eyes slowly, not rejecting his touch.

Finally his hands ran through the bearings of her hair, and reached her pale skin. Touching her ears, he moved his index finger and his pointer finger, outlining her ears, before reaching her cheeks.

She moved a bit, as the sensation tickled her.

Vantie then moved his palm inward, letting his whole hand, not just his fingertips, touch her cheeks.

She too leaned inward, pressing her hands against his hand, which pressed against her cheek. {Confused you, didnt I/? Heeeeee }

Alicia closed her eyes and they both stayed their for a long time.

Suddenly, Vantie stood up, causing Alicia to jerk in surprise.

Not realizing what he did, until he saw Alicia looking at him with her pretty eyes, he apologized.

"Uh, I had a thought, got caught up in the moment."

Vantie started to laugh absentmindedly at his own stupidity

(Man Im dying from my own personal attacks to myself.)

He reached down and grabbed Alicia's small, soft, delicate hands, and pulled her up.

Reaching around her waist, he put his arms around her.

And she did the same.

Staring up at him, she managed to say "Vantie..." Before he put a finger to her lips, silently hushing her.

He pulled her closer to him, squeezing her a bit.

She did the same thing.

Now, with both of them in a bear hug, Vantie spoke first.

"Alicia...I don't know, You and I are completely different. I'm too different. Im not like Sanjinu and Omega, you know that, dont you?"

Vantie looked at her with pleading eyes.

Now it was her turn to put her fingers to his lips.

"Hush, Vantie. I know your not like them. I like you for who you are."

This was all the encouragement that Vantie needed. This was the only person that understood who he was, and liked him for what he was. This was the only person that truly knew him. How could he have been so stupid? He had known Alicia for a long time, through friendships and through hardships. Even when they had been rival's, when they first met, Vantie couldn't believe himself for being so careless.

Moving his hands up her back, he ran his bare hands up her neck, through her hair and to the back of her head.

His eyes glimmering at Alicia, while her's glimmered back, they both knew what they were about to do.

Leaning forward, Vantie's lips pressed into Alicia's, as he closed his eyes, blindly kissing her. Moving his lips over Alicia's, Vantie was happy, the first emotion he had felt in a long time.

=-=-=-=-

(I won't go into the perverted scenes, but for you that WANT to read them, look down for the goodies)

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Yaaay, All done!

I hope that satisfied ya guys!

Long Story, eh?

Oh wellz, I really enjoyed writing this out!



Cant wait for the reply, Alicia, or Sanjinu if you came back, or Omega if your there.


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More down







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There you go




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Vantie pressed his lips harder onto Alicia's and she pressed even harder still. He could feel her tongue moving over his lips, as his moved over hers, but theyre tongues never seemed to meet. Vanatiel quickly made good haste to elminate this nuiscance.

He let his mouth open while they kissed, and felt Alicia's tongue meet his.
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Okay! Okay! Okay! I cant take it any more! Ownage I have to tell you. you may remember these fragments of your posts:

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...When I finished my story, the lady, Alicia Stormcrow, Prison Escape Murderer, #5543, didn't seem scared of me at all. In fact, she seemed as though she had sunk into a deeper depth of reality, in which she had stored her emotions. This lady had a place of reality...a plane..in which she stored her feelings...in which she hid them from people like me..she too, had a dark past, I realized. She hid her pain, within herself, and gave out a steadfast, strong, and powerful woman...
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..."Alicia...I know who you are. I met you in the past...when I was truly evil...and darkness was my power...I came to your village, accompanied by five other necromancers... As a child, I came there, seeking refuge, and food, only to be turned away, and mocked. As a grown necromancer, I came there, seeking revenge. Us five necromancers split up, and killed every person in our way. I couldn't kill the women, and the children of the village...as I remembered my own childhood.. But I tended to the men. The others didn't follow my example...They killed anyone. When we thought that we had killed everyone in the village...you...alicia, you came out of a fallen home..You were near my age...young, beautiful... but my mission here was to kill everything that walked in the village.. My first instinct was to kill you...but I just..couldn't.. When you saw me, you started to scream. I cursed at you, and told you to run...but you stood in place. Suddenly, another member of my party saw you and ran at you, wanting to kill you. I told him not to...but he continued to rush towards you. I was closer.... so I decided to save you. I grabbed you by your waist, and ran into the forests with you on my back. But the necromancers followed me, and eventually caught up. They threw spells at you...but I took them. I have felt pain...so I wasn't hurt from it, but for you, it would be a different story. The pain was both mental and physical...I couldn't allow you to feel that emotion.. I still ran, to the next city...Lions Arch. I ran you through killer insects..killer plants...huge centaurs...everything. But my party was smart... They finally threw a spell intentionally at me, making me drop onto the ground, letting you fall onto the ground. They walked up and wielded a vampiric hilt. They stabbed you with it, in the same place...twice. You died on that day. Well...I woke up the next day, to find you dead...stabbed twice. I couldn't forigve myself, for not saving you. I cried for your death, remembering my own childhood. I had a chance to save you, and I failed. But I suddenly remembered the scar that Grenth had given me. I tried the same ritual upon you...cutting my skin...then rubbing the blood upon my hand and pummeling it into your death wound. I was surprised that it worked...It gave you life again. Suddenly, a group of the White Mantle came out of the bushes, and came towards me, with an evil grin. I was drained of my power...weak and pitiful...since I have given you half of my life...half of my power.. I stooped over, and whispered into your ear the last words that you would hear, before you woke up from your dreams...and found me gone...taken by the white mantle.."...
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...Slowly he reached down with his gloved hand, and somehow got his fingertips underneath her chin. He slowly pulled her face up, and stared into her eyes, which were shimmering magically, with the glassy tears, like the shining raindrops that use to fall upon Vantie while he was alone in the isolated wilds. "I never took my gloves off, before" he said, letting her chin rest on his knee, covered with his blackened armour. Vantie slowly tugged his gloves off, showing Alicia, the only person other than his childhood mother, see his bare hands. Wrought with scars and sickening lines, many people would become upset at this, but Alicia didn't.

She remained quiet, turning her head, so that she sat on the floor while having her turned head rest quitely on Vanatiel's knees.

Reaching up slowly, Vantie touched Alicia's silky, beautiful silver hair, the first thing he had touched with his bare hands, for a long time. He ran his fingertips through her hair, letting his hand feel her silky, long, silver hair.

She closed her eyes slowly, not rejecting his touch...

These are the parts of your post that I swear to God, made me cry the first time I read them. They are the parts where you really get into your writing and are comfortable with yourself, the parts where you reveal who you really are, insted of trying to play off a made up character, thus making them, imo, the most beautiful. The best writers do this often. You have potential.
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hooray for ownage!

that was AWESOME!
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BTW, Alicia, Is that a good thing?

Thank you divinity!

It seems I have met the standards of the gals!

*dances around*

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yes, its a good thing
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Now keep writing Ownage!

<brings out the whip>

and you too storm! I like reading this story

"I like reading this story"
*eye twitches*

bu it's true.
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