Curse

Destruction Exile · Feb 13, 2006, 04:23 PM // 16:23

My girlfriend is the best
Every Guy in school wants her breast.
But im always with her by her side,
Even cheating on a test.

Rumors says shes used to be fat,
How the heck did she turn like that?
She used to wear a baseball cap,
Now she's wearing a feathery hat.

Tommy said she is a dirty girl,
A girl that gets so much referral.
Mandy said she owned this world,
No guy can resist this dirty girl.

My girl always spending me money,
But i always fall for her when she calls me honey.
With a kiss she blew I flew by her side,
The charm she gives me were all big lies.

Jeff says she cheats on many guys,
So quick, so swift, like a beautiful butterfly.
She is also deadly, more deadly than a Fly,
One sting by it, and you can say goodbye.

The Son Of Morgoth · Feb 13, 2006, 06:11 PM // 18:11

nice rhyme scheme

Destruction Exile · Feb 13, 2006, 06:23 PM // 18:23

thx, tryin to use other topics to make a poem besides sad and love

ownage of teh elite · Feb 14, 2006, 03:24 PM // 15:24

^Hehehe.

I know how you feel man.

Gotta show them other guys that she's yours.

Alpha Man instincts.

That's the way to go.

~Ownage

Makkert · Feb 14, 2006, 03:38 PM // 15:38

nice rhyme.
The rhyme scheme (i.e. ABBA, AABB or ABAB) is somethimes away, but still this reads very smooth. I like the recurring elements.
Meh, never mind me, everyone is a critic

8/10

Mustache Mayhem · Feb 14, 2006, 08:52 PM // 20:52

I like it.. especially the part about your girl being fat and she was eating burritos

Destruction Exile · Feb 14, 2006, 09:02 PM // 21:02

burritos 0_0??