Curse

lobal · Jun 29, 2006, 01:50 PM // 13:50

Walking To Closely Between The Darkness And Light
Steadying Myself For The Coming Fight
Focused Completly, Aiding My Will
Though I Shudder On The Inside, Outside I Am Still

And If I Should Die This Beautiful Day
Let Only My Love Be Carried Away
Leave My Body For All To See
For This Is The Way It Was Meant To Be
A Warrior's Life And A Warrior's Death
For Some Of Us There's Nothing Else Left

Leon_Ux-ixen · Jun 29, 2006, 04:09 PM // 16:09

It is a nice warrior's creed poem. the flow and ryems make it easy to read. Short yet sweet very good piece.

the pretender · Jun 29, 2006, 04:35 PM // 16:35

it was short but good would whant to see more. From The: Promise Land
I found the way to catch a bear with a mesmer. By using Imagine Burden
Then I use Charm.

Canadian Bacon · Jul 01, 2006, 07:01 AM // 07:01

Quote:

Originally Posted by the pretender

it was short but good would whant to see more. From The: Promise Land
I found the way to catch a bear with a mesmer. By using Imagine Burden
Then I use Charm.

Is it me, or is that completely irrelevant?

Anyways, I really liek this poem. I feel like I'm stealing Leon's words, but the flow and the way the rhyming fits into it make this piece a keeper.

Storm Crow · Jul 01, 2006, 12:59 PM // 12:59

Blek. I feel this poem seems a bit too much Necro and not enough Wammo. Rhyming AABBCC is my least favorite scheme, but, you made a good effort. B+.

IMMORTALkuma · Jul 02, 2006, 09:59 AM // 09:59

short and sweet i liked it

I pwnd U · Jul 02, 2006, 03:53 PM // 15:53

Its good but i agree with Storm. It sounds more like a Necro at first. Warriors know that they are on the good side. Unless you are talking about two opposing forces, then each considers itself good. Anyways its a good poem. I like it. A

Nilator · Jul 03, 2006, 03:20 PM // 15:20

You forgot the part about pulling enemy warriors to allied monks.

LOBAL 2 · Jul 03, 2006, 06:05 PM // 18:05

First,let me say I do have another account, long story.

Second, the peom isn't necro, it's about A warrior's coming to terms with killing and understanding that it's wrong and it's been his whole life so rather than turn from what he's been doing and is the only thing he's good at, he takes a deep breath and gets ready to kill again.

Third, if you don't like my style of writing (AABBCC) cool, it's your opinion
and opinion's are like ---holes everybody's got one.

last and not least thanks for the reply's. I'm glad someone likes it

ZenRgy · Jul 03, 2006, 06:44 PM // 18:44

Can't say I'm a big fan of rhyming poetry, makes it seem more plastic/fake/mass-produced.

Good job though.

Canadian Bacon · Jul 08, 2006, 08:47 PM // 20:47

Quote:

Originally Posted by ZenRgy

Can't say I'm a big fan of rhyming poetry, makes it seem more plastic/fake/mass-produced.

Good job though.

Rhyming is only terrible (in my opinion) when words that don't really work are thrown in just to achieve the rhyme.

Antigone · Jul 21, 2006, 08:29 PM // 20:29

Quote:

Originally Posted by lobal

A Warrior's Life And A Warrior's Death
For Some Of Us There's Nothing Else Left

love that line - sounds like it belongs in a movie

like the guy said up there, this would make an awesome creed.