Curse

dekboi · Jun 02, 2006, 10:04 PM // 22:04

Storm Crow i like your style of peotry, your imagery is very good and i really enjoyed reading through the thread.

Well done to all the other poets who have also posted their work in this thread.

Keep up the good work guys.

"There in the tomb drops the faint moonlight
But winds come up from the shore
they shake when the winds roar
Old bones upon the mountian shake"

- Extract from "The Black Tower"
- W.B. Yeats

My favourite poem and poet ever

fiery · Jun 02, 2006, 11:56 PM // 23:56

Row Row Row Your Boat.

Leon_Ux-ixen · Jun 09, 2006, 01:26 PM // 13:26

Heres one of the ones I did on Nightwish.com's forum.

~ ~ ~Fallen Angel~ ~ ~

My lighted way lost
My fear builds up
My heart shakes
My soul’s screams

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

Sadistic thoughts fill my head
Devil inspired hate grips my heart
Are these feelings of the fallen angel
Or my human mind playing tricks on me

A Book lying idle and dead
The words poison to my ears
The slightest touch burns
Just drop it in a box and forget

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

The terrors of shadows unknown to me
Demons’ gifts razors in disguise
Their promise empty like my belief in religion
I close my eyes and count to ten wishing it all away

The power of choice is mine to use
The right to chose what belief open to all
All these tools forgotten with the book in the box

Shadows wiped away, fear drained away
Heart and soul at ease
My life the way it was before my mass confusion
The answers so clear like the moon lite ocean.

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

My life in my control again…

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

The darkness forced away…

Set my soul free
Release me from the dark
Guide me oh holy ones
Send me to my paradise

Awaken to the rising sun, soul free, mind clear
No longer a fallen angel in my dream

Storm Crow · Jun 16, 2006, 11:32 PM // 23:32

Here's a freeverse I dug up from a few months ago...

Lost

Cold,
A harsh wind blows,
Even the trees shiver,
Snow falls off of the thached roof above,
Smoke billows from the old chimney,
The fire slowly flickers, and goes out,
And the clock grows still,
And time is lost...

Forever...

LOBAL 2 · Jul 05, 2006, 12:49 AM // 00:49

wow stromcrow u judge but can't be judged lol funny....the poems are good though i was suprised but it looked alittle (ABAB) to me.

Good stuff i would like to see more

Storm Crow · Jul 05, 2006, 04:00 AM // 04:00

None of my poems are ABAB, they're all ABCB...

But, yes, I can be judged, it's just that the member that was judging me was essentially using huge, complicated words and sentences to say "Your stuff sucks.", and that I do not take kindly to.

Ristaron · Jul 05, 2006, 06:32 PM // 18:32

Well if you can be judged, here's my honest assessment:

Your poems are meaningful and something I value reading, but after the second or third PAGE of four-line ABCB I have to admit I found myself doubting your ability to challenge yourself. Poetry is not merely about rhym and rhythm, and while you've captured an essense of what you mean in your many of your poems, I simply can't find the true emotion in most of them.
Perhaps that's why I have to agree with 'Sir's 'emo' assessment. To me, the whole 'emo' fad represents a false pretense for unreasonable depression. When I read your writing, I find a metaphorical truth to the words, but there is no passion I can detect aside from your apparent (and applaudable) love of telling stories.
When I can feel the emotion, your poems will turn from admirable to moving. Until then, I suggest you continue to push yourself - you can be even better.

<Edit>: And if you have an objection to my large, complicated words, then your vocabulary could use work as well. Don't shoot others down for something you haven't yet achieved.

The Primeval King · Jul 05, 2006, 07:09 PM // 19:09

This one came from the bottom of my heart...

Once upon a time,
Once upon a day,
Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Found a Dino who was gay.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Tried to flirt with the gay dino.
But no matter what she tried,
The dino was nowhere near as horny as a Rhino.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Cried all day long
The only thing the dino would do
Is sing to her this song

"F is for friends who do stuff together!
U is for you and me!
N is for anything at anytime at all!
Down here in the deep green... grass."

So Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Became very mad
She found a thug to beat him up
(The thug was her dad)

As soon as Dino saw the man
He broke out into a smile.
"This is the guy I have been looking for!
I've been waiting for awhile!"

As soon as Mr. Lopenscotch
Saw the Dino's face
He realized that he really was
A total and utter disgrace

Girls have cooties
Ugly booties
Nowhere near as fine
As a dino.
So they hooked up
Had some F-U-N
And Lilly Lopenscotch found her dreamy Rhino.

I hope nobody takes insult to this lol

LOBAL 2 · Jul 11, 2006, 02:59 AM // 02:59

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ristaron

Well if you can be judged, here's my honest assessment:

Your poems are meaningful and something I value reading, but after the second or third PAGE of four-line ABCB I have to admit I found myself doubting your ability to challenge yourself. Poetry is not merely about rhym and rhythm, and while you've captured an essense of what you mean in your many of your poems, I simply can't find the true emotion in most of them.
Perhaps that's why I have to agree with 'Sir's 'emo' assessment. To me, the whole 'emo' fad represents a false pretense for unreasonable depression. When I read your writing, I find a metaphorical truth to the words, but there is no passion I can detect aside from your apparent (and applaudable) love of telling stories.
When I can feel the emotion, your poems will turn from admirable to moving. Until then, I suggest you continue to push yourself - you can be even better.

<Edit>: And if you have an objection to my large, complicated words, then your vocabulary could use work as well. Don't shoot others down for something you haven't yet achieved.

I have no choice but to agree with you on the large word,no vocabulary thing....if you don't understand what someone is saying don't get pissed, pick a dictionary and find out, or their is the alternate route take 50 cents and call someone who knows....I have A hard time reading half the posts in these forums and I don't get pissed, I try to find what in the hell their talking about and some ---hole comes around and thinks the ---- had tries to hack on me....but that's life

everyone's poetry here is at the very least good and some are great...but the best poetry always come from massive amounts of emotion,weather it's hate, love, or whatever....the emotion spills out your fingers and on to the paper to create something beautiful (and yes something evil can be beautiful).....usually if you have to think about it, you shouldn't be writing it....

And that is what grabs the reader the emotion,not what they think the peom is about cuz for every person every poem is different....and they will never be able to guess what you were thinking or feeling when you wrote it....so if they try and flame your work then they have no clue as to their on emotions, or their retarded.....

LOBAL 2 · Jul 11, 2006, 03:06 AM // 03:06

Quote:

Originally Posted by The Primeval King

This one came from the bottom of my heart...

Once upon a time,
Once upon a day,
Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Found a Dino who was gay.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Tried to flirt with the gay dino.
But no matter what she tried,
The dino was nowhere near as horny as a Rhino.

Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Cried all day long
The only thing the dino would do
Is sing to her this song

"F is for friends who do stuff together!
U is for you and me!
N is for anything at anytime at all!
Down here in the deep green... grass."

So Little Lilly Lopenscotch
Became very mad
She found a thug to beat him up
(The thug was her dad)

As soon as Dino saw the man
He broke out into a smile.
"This is the guy I have been looking for!
I've been waiting for awhile!"

As soon as Mr. Lopenscotch
Saw the Dino's face
He realized that he really was
A total and utter disgrace

Girls have cooties
Ugly booties
Nowhere near as fine
As a dino.
So they hooked up
Had some F-U-N
And Lilly Lopenscotch found her dreamy Rhino.

I hope nobody takes insult to this lol

ROTFLMAO this is funny as hell nice bro

Canadian Bacon · Jul 11, 2006, 03:31 AM // 03:31

Quote:

Originally Posted by LOBAL 2

ROTFLMAO this is funny as hell nice bro

QFT, love the Spongebob allusion

Antigone · Jul 21, 2006, 08:48 PM // 20:48

don't yell now - but i think you need to be able to take criticism better... :/

Storm Crow · Aug 01, 2006, 06:00 AM // 06:00

I improved a poem today, waiting for guildies to do FoW and utter boredom

Venture to the Fissure

Heroes, allies, call on me,
And what befates us we shall see,

Down in Fissure, dank and cold,
Many things we shall behold,

Shadows mean and beasts of bone,
None should venture through alone,

Come one, come all, to Temple dear,
We are with you, do not fear,

The things that lurk in shadows deep,
Nor the monsters, scary creep,

Through the Fissure, dank and cold,
What treasures shall our eyes behold?

Heroes, allies, call on me,
And what befates us we shall see.

PLEASE NOTE: AABBCC rhyme scheme, and in couplets!!

I'm so proud of myself!

Sjeng · Aug 01, 2006, 08:35 AM // 08:35

I've always liked this Valentine's poem:

Roses are #FF0000
Violets are #0000FF,
All of my Base,
Are belong to you!

Storm Crow · Aug 23, 2006, 06:56 AM // 06:56

Going back to my roots after several unsuccessful attempts at something different, a poem dedicated to my girls, literally cried when I was writing this, the paper is tearstained...

Also, this is better to be heard when read simultaneously by ten women, since it is more or less something that poured out of my characters, not me.

*S*T*O*R*M*C*R*O*W*

Never forget us,
Never give up,
Always remember,
To follow your heart,

We've always loved you,
And we always will,
True love never dies,
And ours never shall,

There's strength in our numbers,
And strength in our hearts,
But more than both those,
There is strenth in us,

Strength in the spirit,
Strength in the fame,
Strength in the sisters,
And strength in the name...

Laugh at me if you want, my girls are a part of me, and if anything happened to any one of them, I'd bawl my eyes out. You can criticize me if you want, you can tell me they're just "toons" or "computer animations", but no. To me, they're much more than that. I've taken the time to give them stories, to give them a background, a history, and life. They live and breathe, they feel, see, hear, smell and taste. They are what makes me who I am today, they each represent a part of me that is individual, and each part makes it's own character.

To Garria, my rage and anger, to Varda, my internal chaos, to Alicia, my passion, to Aerily, my primal intuition, to Mierna, my compassion, to Ksaiya, my solitude, to Revvarah, my mistakes, to Bennah, my desire, to Jadyn, my sorrow, to Sikara, my revenge, and to every girl from every chapter of Guild Wars to come, I thank you, and I love every one of you.

Storm Crow · Sep 11, 2006, 01:37 AM // 01:37

Got bored...made a new one ><

Unheard

Another tick, another tock,
More unheard sounds from the Grandfather clock,

Another hiss, another scat,
More unheard 'Mew's from the family cat,

Another buzz, another drone,
More unheard rings of the cordless phone,

Another screech, another howl,
More unheard 'Whoo's of the Great Horned Owl

Another clash, another blunder,
More unheard booms of endless thunder,

Another growl, another whine,
More unheard 'Bark's from Clementine,

Another scream, another shout,
More unheard cries of the pain letting out,

Another beat, another breath,
One more girl, who wishes for death...

Truong · Sep 11, 2006, 01:57 AM // 01:57

Well, mentioning Sasuke was unexpected, but overall these poems are nice.

Storm Crow · Sep 11, 2006, 02:53 AM // 02:53

xD! Yah, that was a phase...>< It happens occasionally. I wrote one for Naruto tonight too..I thought he was being left out...xD Now I'll have to do one for all the guys from Naruto! >< Bah.

Mr. G · Sep 11, 2006, 03:57 PM // 15:57

A poem by Mr. G

The arrow Flies,
Across the skys,
Am ready for action,

But im dead when it lands,
I lost my Shielding Hands,
To a signet of Distraction.

Enjoy
^ ^

Aggravaar · Sep 12, 2006, 01:26 PM // 13:26

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mr. G

A poem by Mr. G

The arrow Flies,
Across the skys,
Am ready for action,

But im dead when it lands,
I lost my Shielding Hands,
To a signet of Distraction.

Enjoy
^ ^

lol, I did.

Very nice poetry, guys, I quite enjoyed it.
Here's a bit of meta (I hope) poetry by your's truly:

The Stone Forgets

Here it is – the stone, washed
by rain, tormented
by wind, charred
by our love of words.
And there she stands
miss beauty, teasing
till we burn, mocking
till we blush, laughing
till we laugh back
at ourselves
the wench
And there he sits
mister big truth, biting
where it hurts, scratching
till we bleed, howling
to wake us
the bastard that he is

Almost makes us feel good
when
tormented by wind
washed by rain
and charred by our hate
of life
the words fade
and the stone forgets