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Old Aug 19, 2008, 10:25 PM // 22:25   #1
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Default A portrait of Shia Labeouf (criticism?)

I drew a sketch of Shia Labeouf when I was at work and saw a recent copy of Details magazine with him on the cover. So I decided to try to draw him.

I'm an aspiring artist, and need any type of criticism, good or bad. So, here it is.

http://highgear56.deviantart.com/art...beouf-95389834

WHat do you think?
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Old Aug 19, 2008, 11:10 PM // 23:10   #2
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I didn't know he had so much facial hair
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Old Aug 19, 2008, 11:28 PM // 23:28   #3
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his right eye is a bit big

the clothing looks good though, nice shading

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Old Aug 19, 2008, 11:58 PM // 23:58   #4
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I don't think it looks likes like him at all, I'd need to see the magazine to compare.. But anyhow, better than I could do.
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Old Aug 20, 2008, 01:50 AM // 01:50   #5
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compare the ears. left seems higher
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Old Aug 20, 2008, 02:21 AM // 02:21   #6
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not bad for an untrained sketch. Once you take a drawing class in an actual school (art school/college) You will probably look at it and think its terrible. I used to draw pretty much the same way. Now I look back at my previous work and its just bleh. I'm not good at telling you what you should have done differently or really at explaining techniques that will make your work better than this.

But lets see what sort of critique i can actually manage to give.

right side of the face is off. Pretty much the entire right side is just too large and seems skewed a bit too much. Things appear to be up and to the right more than they should be.

going along with the distortions on the right side of the image your nose shows too much of the left nostril and not enough of the right with the angle you seem to be going for. It appears that you were trying for a not exactly directly face on representation.

Your light source appears to be up and to the right most of your shading is going with this but the right underside of the cheek shadow needs to be adjusted a bit.

right ear needs to be brought down and in a bit also a lil less shading a bit more highlighting.

lips came out quite well for a male figure just the right amount of shading and detail.

I suggest you remove the distorted looking finger from the portrait as well as it is generally unappealing, disproportionate, and appears to be some sort of "small hand".

The man appears to have small feminine shoulders. Unless this is actually how this man looks I suggest decreasing the angle on them.

One last thing try not to have such a definite hairline. Better blending techniques can help to make the hairline more natural feeling.

Hope some of this actually makes sense and helps you along.

Good luck.
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Old Aug 20, 2008, 02:33 AM // 02:33   #7
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not bad for an untrained sketch. Once you take a drawing class in an actual school (art school/college) You will probably look at it and think its terrible. I used to draw pretty much the same way. Now I look back at my previous work and its just bleh. I'm not good at telling you what you should have done differently or really at explaining techniques that will make your work better than this.

But lets see what sort of critique i can actually manage to give.

right side of the face is off. Pretty much the entire right side is just too large and seems skewed a bit too much. Things appear to be up and to the right more than they should be.

going along with the distortions on the right side of the image your nose shows too much of the left nostril and not enough of the right with the angle you seem to be going for. It appears that you were trying for a not exactly directly face on representation.

Your light source appears to be up and to the right most of your shading is going with this but the right underside of the cheek shadow needs to be adjusted a bit.

right ear needs to be brought down and in a bit also a lil less shading a bit more highlighting.

lips came out quite well for a male figure just the right amount of shading and detail.

I suggest you remove the distorted looking finger from the portrait as well as it is generally unappealing, disproportionate, and appears to be some sort of "small hand".

The man appears to have small feminine shoulders. Unless this is actually how this man looks I suggest decreasing the angle on them.

One last thing try not to have such a definite hairline. Better blending techniques can help to make the hairline more natural feeling.

Hope some of this actually makes sense and helps you along.

Good luck.
Thank you much for your critique, I learned a bit from it.

The lighting is correct to my reference, but yes the nostril I should improve on. The ears do seem a bit off as well, and the hair didn't come out the way I wanted it too.

I need more practice and training, but nonetheless thanks for the criticism. It will only help me in the future.
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