Curse

Konig Des Todes · May 30, 2009, 05:32 AM // 05:32

9,000 words is 5,000 words over the limit. O_o

Also, holy RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOing walls of text add in some spaces in there between the paragraphs or something!

Zodiac Meteor · May 30, 2009, 05:38 AM // 05:38

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Originally Posted by Konig Des Todes

9,000 words is 5,000 words over the limit. O_o walls of text add in some spaces in there between the paragraphs or something!

It was double spaced on Microsoft word. In the e-mail is was also double spaced and easier to read. Good idea, just in case e-mail didn't make it.

I'm really worried I won't be judged because it's to long. Come on, I took out all the subplots,

a main RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOing character for gods sake (Starr, which was suppose to travel with Grim and kill the SPOILER at the end).
The final battle with the Ghostly Saltspray dragon didn't end how I wanted it (Suppose to be an EPIC AWESOMESAUSE kill by Cynn, Devona and Aiden)
I also didn't explain Bonfaaz leave during the decisive battle.
I did a horrible job explaining the double agent thing near the end. Mainly because a subplot was taken out that shows Anthony and Fends leave from Vabbi to Ring of Fire Islands, where they promised to find Grim and take him out. Mhenlo was involved in that subplot.
The SPOILER was suppose to be taken out by Cynn and not Bonfaaz.
I have a better after effect ending, but I had to summarize it to the most extreme.
Removed a subplot that Bonfaaz will take Roan and train him the right way (WHICH RUINED THE RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOING ENDING, AHHHHH.)
The Rain of Judgment was unexplained and overall dull. It was powerful and summoned a flying castle (WHICH SHOULD HAVE BEEN A RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOING FORTRESS! AHHH) Well, at least it was better than GW: Prophices decisive battle.
Should have titled Reborn World.
The relations between Roan and Grim was lame. Mainly because the subplot that involved Bonfaaz taking Roan was taken out. (Did i mentioned it ruined the ending overall?)
I could have taken out the beginning paragraph overall.

Those were really disappointing things I had to do (or could have done).

I did more time deleting than writing. If I took out more then the explanations and character development will be... unloved.

Morag D · May 30, 2009, 07:58 AM // 07:58

AAAAAAHHHRGH I'm running out of TIME!!! *panic*
must-type-fasterrrr

pumpkin pie · May 30, 2009, 08:45 AM // 08:45

Don't panic Morag!

i think i have 46 words over hehehe.

the suspense is killing me

Konig Des Todes · May 30, 2009, 08:34 PM // 20:34

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Originally Posted by Zodiac Meteor

I'm really worried I won't be judged because it's to long. Come on, I took out all the subplots,

a main RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOing character for gods sake (Starr, which was suppose to travel with Grim and kill the SPOILER at the end).
The final battle with the Ghostly Saltspray dragon didn't end how I wanted it (Suppose to be an EPIC AWESOMESAUSE kill by Cynn, Devona and Aiden)
I also didn't explain Bonfaaz leave during the decisive battle.
I did a horrible job explaining the double agent thing near the end. Mainly because a subplot was taken out that shows Anthony and Fends leave from Vabbi to Ring of Fire Islands, where they promised to find Grim and take him out. Mhenlo was involved in that subplot.
The SPOILER was suppose to be taken out by Cynn and not Bonfaaz.
I have a better after effect ending, but I had to summarize it to the most extreme.
Removed a subplot that Bonfaaz will take Roan and train him the right way (WHICH RUINED THE RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOING ENDING, AHHHHH.)
The Rain of Judgment was unexplained and overall dull. It was powerful and summoned a flying castle (WHICH SHOULD HAVE BEEN A RED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GORED ENGINE GOING FORTRESS! AHHH) Well, at least it was better than GW: Prophices decisive battle.
Should have titled Reborn World.
The relations between Roan and Grim was lame. Mainly because the subplot that involved Bonfaaz taking Roan was taken out. (Did i mentioned it ruined the ending overall?)
I could have taken out the beginning paragraph overall.

Those were really disappointing things I had to do (or could have done).

I did more time deleting than writing. If I took out more then the explanations and character development will be... unloved.

Grammar also an issue, I was gonna read it but the grammar made my head split. No offense. x)

And I suggest you try making a short story, not a small novel next time. You don't want to be better than the game, just add in a quest-chain size adventure (think of The Oddbodies chain - that would be the size of a short story)

Morag D · May 30, 2009, 09:11 PM // 21:11

Weheee managed to get mine in! *phew* fortunately it had been in my head for about three weeks now so it only had to be typed out

good luck to everyone, there's some really nice stories here! (didn't read them before because I didn't want to be influenced, lol)

Zodiac Meteor · May 30, 2009, 09:42 PM // 21:42

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Originally Posted by Konig Des Todes

Grammar also an issue, I was gonna read it but the grammar made my head split. No offense. x)

Yeah, the grammer was horrible and I should have waited and viewed it more. Oh well, that's what I get for a rushed entree.

I made it as short as possible, still having some meaningful events in there. If made it any shorter I will have to redo the entire plot

, basically doing an entire story

SmartBomb · May 30, 2009, 10:00 PM // 22:00

I emailed mine just a little while ago. This is an awesome contest!

StarrTheInsane · May 30, 2009, 10:52 PM // 22:52

Thanks guys! I've updated the list of entries. After tomorrow, I'll post the others on the list and then add the last minute entries as I have a chance to read through them. Getting close now.

Zodiac, I got your email. Thank you for understanding. I thought it was a cool idea to have the soundtrack for your story (I read it again here with the music to see if things had a different feel to them).

Like I've said, I'm not getting really bent out of shape over the grammar and spelling. I asked that the story be written in English, and anticipated that there would be entries from people who know it as a second language. That keeps me from being unfair when they have great story ideas they are trying to express, but also means I can't come down on people who are clearly native speakers either.

Overall, I am enjoying the stories. My only complaint so far is with the mechanics of my own contest, which I can't change. It has been very educational for me. If I decide to have another writing contest in the future, I will definitely extend the limit. Unfortunately, that means I would also have to extend the length of time between the deadline and the results.

pumpkin pie · May 31, 2009, 04:41 AM // 04:41

Thank you StarrTheInsane for the competition.

Well done to all the entrants. and good luck.

Konig Des Todes · May 31, 2009, 05:48 AM // 05:48

Nearly done!

Finishing up the last bit. ^_^ It's currently at about 2,500 and I expect about 3,000. words of course.

Edit: Yay! Finished! At 2:25 AM with 3,624 words. ^_^

Gonna have someone proof read it then send it in the morning.

pumpkin pie · May 31, 2009, 08:14 AM // 08:14

Proof reading is a good idea! I was in a rush, and forgot a few sentences and spacing towards the end of my story.

khezial tahr · May 31, 2009, 05:34 PM // 17:34

Sent mine as well in a PM! Several actually. Good luck to all!

FengShuiDove · Jun 01, 2009, 02:12 AM // 02:12

Submitted, with *slightly* over 4,000 words. I wish I had some more space to write too, but I think I compressed it decently down to size.

StarrTheInsane · Jun 01, 2009, 03:39 AM // 03:39

Alright, I updated the wordpress blog with the entries that I've read (mostly just adding the ones that were waiting until the deadline). Looks like I have 4 stories to read that came in today. FengShuiDove, khezial tahr, Konig Des Todes, and theflatline are all queued up for the morning and I'll be sending you notes as I finish them. Just to give you some feedback and let you know when they are added to the site.

Thanks again everyone and I can tell this is going to be intense. Results should be posted on Friday with the beginning of Part 2: The Sketch Contest!

EDIT: I've read through all the entries now and posted them to the site (links to individual entries are posted in the announcement on this thread). You guys really took me on an adventure! Sorry for the delay getting those posted today, our new modem just came in this morning (w00t).

DBZVelena · Jun 02, 2009, 04:02 PM // 16:02

I re-read my story today XD
I so could have done a little better ^_^;;
But even if i don't win a thing, i had fun making it.

pumpkin pie · Jun 02, 2009, 05:26 PM // 17:26

I made quite a few mistakes in joining the story together, spelled alone as along, have spacing problem towards the end of the story, got a bit excited and forgot to double spaced, also not have enough time to actually study the map carefully, to pin point where they should meet and because of the length of the story. but I had fun thinking up this story.

Konig Des Todes · Jun 02, 2009, 08:02 PM // 20:02

Peer editing ftw :P

Edit: ACK! Is there no Italics in the wordpress website? No one could tell the difference from thoughts and explanations in my story! X_X

I don't like the format of the wordpress website... >_> No centering and no italics? No indents? Booooo!

khezial tahr · Jun 04, 2009, 03:20 PM // 15:20

Wow... looks like I tried too hard to stay close to the 2500 words. I so could have added more. And I even stripped some stuff off to stay close. With more space I think I could have gotten some things through clearer, but oh well. It was fun to write and I hope it's fun to read!

StarrTheInsane · Jun 05, 2009, 06:03 AM // 06:03

Blast, this is tough! I have reasons I love each of them.

Another entry was just added to the list. Tzu made arrangements with me prior to the deadline explaining her situation, and though I'm not at liberty to say what the situation is, believe me when I say it counts as an extreme situation.