Curse

Illusions of Fate · Dec 06, 2010, 02:09 AM // 02:09

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~Prologue~

Knock...knock...knock...
"Jimmy! Jimmy, get up!"
"Huh?" said Jimmy.
"Get up damnit!"
Knock...knock...
"Get the #### up now! We got to go!"
"Okay okay." he mumbled.
I grab his hand and pull him up.
"Get your pack!"
Knock...
"poop! Forget the pack, lets go!"
"Wai--"
I hear a gunshot, then a silent scream from next to me.
"####! Jimmy!"
I start to run off to the other side of the barn, jump on the boxes, then out the window. I run until I get to the fence, just passed the parking lot, which always has just one car. I stop, and turn to face the barn. I think....should I do it?
I pull out my iPhone from my bag, type 2662 on my keypad. I pause for a minute, I have a wave of regret, I close my eyes and send it.

BOOM!

The phone rings; I answer.
"Is it done?" said a strange voice.
"Of course it is, you know me."
"Good, you are still the best of the best Erik. I am transfering your next assignment now."
"Thanks...I guess."
"What's wrong Erik?"
"Nothing."

~Chapter One~
~~One Year Later~~

"poop!" I wake up to the smell of blood. I look at my leg. "####! What happened last night?"
I look around the room, but I can't identify where I am.
"You, my good man, are at the transition stage." said a dark figure, who revealed himself just enough to see his outline. He looks familiar.
"Wh-who are you?"
The dark figure steps closer into my dull and gray lamp light.
"Jimmy!? But how? I blew you up!"
"Yes, you did." said Jimmy.
"Then...how!? How are you alive?"
"You should be asking youself why you are dead."
I bust out of my warm bed and down the hall. Left, left is the next door, I will go in there. I burst through the door and lock the door. When I turn on the light, I find I am in a small torture chamber, it has a mirror, and I go to it.
I stare into my own unrecognizable eyes, bewildered I feel my face for confirmation. I see Jimmy appear behind me.
"So, why am I here?" I said.
"Well to kill of course!" said Jimmy. Although he started to walk away.

~Chapter Two~
~~The Devil's Dirty Work~~

I awoke in a hot and musty room, Jimmy took the sack off my head. When I opened my eyes, I stumbled backwards. I tried to not look at its face, so I examined the room. It was a decent size, about the size of my apartment, but there was only one light. It was not a usual light that came through a bulb, no it appeared to look like a crystal. But why is it so dull?
I was interrupted from my thoughts when the thing spoke.
"Hello Erik, I am glad you could make it," said the thing in a deep and demonic voice "my name is Krull."
"Well Krull, what exactly are you?"
"I am an angel sent from god."
"Why would god live in such a place as this?"
"Because of that..." said another demon pointing at the mysterious light. His finger was long and skinny, but looked like a claw. He was a light skinned demon, which I thought odd.
"How do you call yourselves angelic, you look like demons!"
Krull growled "How do you call yourself a human?"
I thought for a moment; I was stumped.
"Listen, I can explain everything later, first we need to test you." said Jimmy.
"Test me how?"
"With your first assignment." said Krull.
"How!? I am dead!""
Krull threw me a sack, it appeared to be screaming. After that, the bag was put over my head. I heard a sharp screech, then everything went black.

When I awoke, again, someone...something was infront of me. The room was pitch black.
"So what do you want on your body?" said a deep voice.
"Huh?"
"What weapons do you want!?" the thing seemed to be agitated.
"Umm...a gun?"
A sharp pain ran up my arm, and I screamed.
"What the hell was that!?"
"That, was what you asked for." said the voice.
Then there was that loud screech again, then blackness.

~Chapter Three~
~~My First Assignment~~

I woke up with my arm still in pain. I am laying on a bench; I look for the nearest store, New York Cofee. I try to get a glimpse of my arm, but it is too dark. Tonight is a moonless night. So I feel my arm, and all feels normal.
I start to walk down the street, there are crimes all over the place. Burning houses, street fights, and even people being shot. I see a car coming straight for me, I dodge into the nearest alley. The alley seemed to go on for eternity, it was dark and cold, yet it had a strange sense of saftey. What place am I in where the world is crooked? Everything seems...different. Am I in the fut--
I was suddenly grabbed and brought inside a room. There was a group of ten, maybe twelve, standing in a circle. I was pushed into the middle. I kept spinning around, trying to look for an exit. All the meanwhile they start to chant and close in on me. I found an exit.
I bolt for the exit, and push a guy or two out of the way. I reach to open a door, when a person in a red cloak appears before me. He pulls down his red hood. He must be the leader, because everyone else has black cloaks and hoods.
"Good evening Erik." said Jimmy.
I give a great sigh of relief. While everyone bursts in laughter.
"Your assignment is Karl Mondel. He is a high ranking demon, so try not to die." said that strange voice, similar to the one from my phone a year ago.
"Okay..." I said.
"Whats wrong Erik?" said the voice. Just then I realized--no it can't be, could it?
"Nothing, nothing at all."
"Then go, you know your way out."
I walked out the door, and a dark and strange looking man greets me.
"Hello Erik." said the figure.
"Wh-Who are you?"
"Karl, Karl Mondel." said the man.
I search my jean pockets for a weapon, nothing.
"What do you want?"
"Wouldn't you like to know some answers?" said Karl.
"Yeah, how did I die?"
"You know the chick in there?"
"Yeah."
"She killed you." said Karl.
"Why?" I said.
"To keep you away from me. Erik, we are at war, and they are holding your true power back. Come with me, and we will unleash your power!"
I thought for a moment...I like power.
"No, I would never betray Jimmy!"
Just then Karl seemed to reach inside his coat.
"Fine then." said Karl.
Just the a sudden pain ran up my arm; it morphed, morphed into a sword. Karl pulled out a sword from under his coat, and blocked my thrust. I tried to slash at his legs, but he jumped, jumped ontop of the dumpster behind him.
"So predictable!" yelled Karl.
Just then, there is a loud bang, and he falls to the ground.
"C'mon! Run Erik!" said Jimmy.
I started to run, but I heard a ruffle behind me; I ran faster. I knew it wasnt over, I felt like someone or something was watching me....waiting.

~Chapter 4~
~The Killing~

"Yesterday, yesterday was when I saw him die."
"Katie, can you explain how he died?" Said the officer.
"I am not sure, it was a gun of some type, but when he shot it...there was this sharp scream. It hurt my ears and it felt like my head was going to explode."
"Okay, thanks katie. You can go now."
"Thanks, I hope you catch this guy."
I did not tell them everything, I feared I would be next. I saw that 'guy' who was shot, he looked normal. But...but the other guy, he had a arm coming out of his arm! And-and he was kinda see-through. I am still not sure as to what that gun was though. It was very decorative, yet it shot a white ghostly bullet, that screamed! I don't really think I want to know what it was though.

When I got to my house, I opened my door very cautiously. It was number 63, and the hallway seemed very lifeless. I flicked the light switch, nothing. Then, I hear that scream, then blackness.

"Hello Katie."
I opened my eyes very wide, and tried to run. I was tied down.
"Its you!" I said "Wh-what are you doing here?"
"I thought you would be a fine assassin."
"Im 18!, I have no intention on killing! Especially after of what I saw a few days ago!"
"Well...then it looks like I have to get to work." It said.
There was that scream again, it didn't really hurt this time.

Critique is welcomed, but note I never finished and might not start back up on it unless people really like it.

Kim Sythe Weilder · Dec 06, 2010, 06:31 AM // 06:31

Um....I'm really confuse. The chapters don't really seem to flow. And you might want to make the characters less shallow, so I know their personality. And explain the arm thingy....confused me. But its an interesting story!

Illusions of Fate · Dec 06, 2010, 08:36 PM // 20:36

I was gunna explain it more, but I never finished it :P

Thanks for the input though, ill definatly use it if/when I start it back up.